There was a knock at the door.
When she opened it she was surprised to see a dark shadow
with a tall pointed hat and a broom near the side of the figure.
When the lightning struck she saw a horrifying face to the
figure, which led her to scream at the top of her lungs and run backwards. While
running she felt her leg hit the back of the sofa forcing her to fall and hit
her head. It was then that the mistress lost her vision.
Meanwhile, at the door the witch took it upon herself to
come into the mistress’s home. She found a few pastries the mistress had baked.
She carried them to the couch by where the unconscious mistress lay. The witch
had a seat on the couch and began to eat. She sat there slowly rocking back and
forth slowly counting to eleven.
She was counting to for her sisters. After about five
minutes one by one they showed up at the door.
“Hello sisters! It is time that we came here to finish our
business. Someone get the kettle boiling!” said witch number one.
Witch number three and four each grabbed a leg that belonged
to the mistress and started dragging her towards the fire place. They laid her
there while the others gathered supplies for the pot of boiling water. They put
different spices, leaves, and hair all in the water. One of them ran around the
pot chanting a curse.
Slowly the mistress started to regain consciousness. She
realized what was happening. The man she had been seeing had warned her that
they would come for her. He was married to a woman that would not let him go. He
rebelled by sleeping with women, but every time his wife found out he had
another lover she would cast a spell. The spell involved one witch at first,
but since the first day the man cheated the numbers have grown.
The witches gathered the body of the mistress and put her in
a chair.
“It is time!” said witch number one.
Then the twelfth witch brought over a bowl that the witches
had been cooking.
The first witch looked down at the mistress and said “This
won’t hurt a bit. It is time you became one of us.” She then splashed the concoction
onto the mistress’s face. Her smooth clear skin then turned to wrinkles and she
began to grow a horn on her head.
The curse was now complete. The witches’ numbers had grown
to thirteen and the wife was completely happy that the woman had become one the
thirteen ugliest people in the world.
Bibliography
The Horned Women by Joseph Jacobs from Celtic Fairy Tales
(1892).
Author's Note:
The original story made me think of how the witches would have appeared. I thought of how strange it would have been to be the mistress. It made me wonder why the mistress deserved this treatment. that inspired me to write of a cheating mistress and how the wife was able to seek revenge on every woman the helped her husband cheat. I thought the Celtic tales were very entertaining and could be interpreted in many different ways.
I really like the plot you came up with and how your story pairs with the original. I especially liked the little surprise/twist at the end where you realize /why/ the witches numbers had grown with each mistress. I actually said "Oh!" while reading in the office and had to explain to a coworker of mine.
ReplyDeleteWhat an amazing story! I really like how you started with such a short simple sentence. It could have gone in so many different directions! You did an amazing job in making the story very dramatic, which fit so well with the plot! You did have a few words missing here and there which messed with the flow a bit, but nothing major. I definitely love the reasoning you had behind your modifications! So interesting!
ReplyDeleteI read this right after your storybook so I liked seeing the use of a villain again in your story. You did a great job with this story. I liked the way you rewrote it from the original. I’m not sure about grammatical errors but someone told me on one of my stories that you’re supposed to keep dialogue in a new paragraph so that might be an error or not.
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh I loved how dramatic this story was! At the end, I couldn't believe it when we learned why the witches numbers got larger with each mistress! haha It kept me guessing and that is really hard for people to do. I much prefer wondering what is going to happen rather than predicting a story the whole way through.
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